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标题: 望湖上·西湖怀情（同学会后）[原创] [打印本页]

作者: dingtiger 时间: 2006-4-24 21:52
标题: 望湖上·西湖怀情（同学会后）[原创]
<p><font face="宋体"><font size="4">                      望湖上</font><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">西湖怀情</span></font></p><p><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">                                  </span></font></p><h1 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">                      赤山居士应十年之约,同学相聚西子湖畔,故友相见,</span></h1><h1 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">                  不胜唏嘘!然性情言谈,恍若当日,大概是同学相</span></h1><h1 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">                  见,放下诸多假面孔之故.个中滋味,实难一时道</span></h1><h1 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">                  </span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;">尽,唯写几句以记之.</span></h1><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><font size="3"><font face="Times New Roman"> <p></p></font></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      三秋桂落，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      满目荷残，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      思想往日香浓。</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      正西湖秋深，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      聚散匆匆，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">                      </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">来去寻梦客他乡。</span></font></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span lang="EN-US"><font size="3"> <p></p></font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      前世修行，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      同学如梦，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      不料世情茫茫。</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      念海誓山盟，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      水月空空，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      此生变幻红尘中。</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span lang="EN-US"><font size="3"> <p></p></font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      十年光限，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">                      </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">转眼夕阳，</span></font></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      相见一时无话。</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      今咫尺千里，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      对错了了，</font></span></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">                      爱恨早与烟云消。</font></span></h5><div></div><div></div><div></div><div></div><div></div>

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作者: ttchl 时间: 2006-4-25 01:33
呵呵！写得还不错！

作者: 一诺千金 时间: 2006-4-25 06:21
<p>强烈佩服</p><p>偶开始怀疑楼主不是偶的老同学了！</p>

作者: 老虎 时间: 2006-4-25 06:53
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>dingtiger</i>在2006-4-24 13:52:00的发言：</b><br/><h5 align="left" class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 125%; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></h5><h5 align="left" class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 125%; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="61"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">                      </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">来去寻梦客他乡。</span></font></h5><h5 align="center" class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 125%; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><font size="61"> </font></span></h5></div><p>不知顺序换成 </p><p>"来去他乡客寻梦" </p><p>效果如何? </p>

作者: dingtiger 时间: 2006-4-25 23:11
<p>谢谢!确实更加押韵,意境也高.原句"客老乡"有几分凄凉,兄之意境则有了几分积极.谢了.</p>

作者: 一诺千金 时间: 2006-4-26 00:42
<p>好像是原创的</p><p>怎么变成转贴了？</p><p>晕</p>

作者: zhaopan 时间: 2006-4-27 03:22
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>老虎</i>在2006-4-24 22:53:00的发言：</b><br/><div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>dingtiger</i>在2006-4-24 13:52:00的发言：</b><br/><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><font size="61"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">                      </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">来去寻梦客他乡。</span></font></h5><h5 class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 125%;"><span lang="EN-US"><font size="61"> </font></span></h5></div><p>不知顺序换成 </p><p>"来去他乡客寻梦" </p><p>效果如何? </p></div><p></p>虎兄：我个人感觉还是楼主的次序好。来去寻梦客他乡，这“客他乡”用得好，客做动词讲，做客他乡、客居他乡，另又可呼应前面的寻梦。以上一己之见而已。

作者: niko 时间: 2006-4-27 05:58
 词真意切,工夫着实了得!"恨错了了，<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><font size="3">爱竟未与烟云消。"这也是一种感觉.</font></span>

作者: 一诺千金 时间: 2006-4-27 19:18
<p>汗</p><p>都是高人啊！</p>

作者: 一诺千钧 时间: 2006-6-6 00:20
<p>为什么我就想不到捏</p>

作者: dingtiger 时间: 2006-6-9 16:26
千金、千斤、千钧，看来这一诺是得到众人的推崇。写一小词，有感而发罢了，也算是对前尘往事的一个了解。

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